First Story: Is one of the Fables of Aesop. The original story portrays the importance of unity and strength among a family or kingdom. After King Edward's death occurs in the story, his eldest son takes reign although Jacob, his other son, was the King's favorite. Jealousy and greediness takes over the mind of the eldest son which led to him acting unrighteously.
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Second Story: The original story is about Sindbad's Fifth voyage. The story is a typical Sindbad voyage, where he sets sail with other merchants and encounters a problem. Being Sindbad he overcomes the problems with the help of his sidekick. He finds valuable trading items on his way back and is able to sell them to become rich.
Third Story: The original story is about the Greedy Crow and it comes from the Philippines. The story is about a greedy crow that worked really hard to find food. When the crow achieved his goal, he left the food behind because a rat passed by and seemed more appealing than the food he had. He failed to capture the rat and as he returned to his space his food was missing. Similarly to the crow, humans often under-appreciate what they have because of the temptations that surround them. This moral theme is recreated in this story into a human tale.
Journey of Ugakhpa: The original story is about journeys of Native American fishermen during winter. In the northwest, weather escalated a lot during winter which resulted in difficult trips to gather food. I chose to invent a northwestern tribe called Mahka tribe. Ugakhpa were a group of ten men who were led by Tall Chief. He led a journey that took place in the beginning of winter that truly tested his ability. I used Tall Chief as my character to lead the Ugakhpa men because he's a famous Ugakpa person whose qualities fit those of the character in the story.
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Hey Afif! I want to start by saying your story is great! Next, I want to say that you might want to look at the layout of you blog. It is pretty hard to read the font because it is a dark color against a dark background. I had to highlight the words so I could read them. What if you changed the color of the background or the font color? Just a suggestion!
ReplyDeleteWhat if you broke the story up a little bit? It is a bit hard to read because it is a lot of text put into big paragraphs. So maybe when you read through it, find places that you can break the ideas up and still keep the flow. It makes it a little easier to read when you are reading small print on a computer screen! Again, just a suggestion.
I was very surprised to hear that Jacob died but I like the way you did it.
Great story!
This was an interesting story! I like how you had the King struggle with breaking away from tradition or honoring his other children with the position of becoming king after he died. It was an unexpected twist to give the eldest son and Jacob two different mothers so that was just another level of tension the King had to deal with, the pressure coming from his Queen. It was interesting that King Edward’s greatest fear was his family breaking apart, but yet he kind of set up his sons to fight over the role of king when he wasn’t sure if he would choose the eldest son as his replacement. I would think with all Jacob’s military experience he would have been able to put up a fight, but at the same time he probably wasn’t expecting his brothers to actually kill him. I am glad you made it a happy ending with the eldest son being held accountable for his actions. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Afif! First off, your story was very intriguing! Secondly, the layout of the blog kind of caught me drifting while reading the story. In a sense, because it’s a white font on dark background, it’s a tad rough on the eyes having to readjust them to read the story in full. Though it is a nice layout in general! It can add to the ambiance you are wanting for your stories and the readers.
ReplyDeleteBack to the story! I really enjoyed reading your version, though I don’t know much about the original source. You captured the idea of unity overpowering a higher power very nicely. I have seen a Korean drama with a similar story, though it’s not so much unity but of one man learning to overcome his fears and trying to maintain his power after gaining it. I always enjoy stories like these, because they teach valuable lessons and get people thinking about how they should view power as a whole. Though the story was a great read in the narrative form, maybe some use of dialogue could add to the action and thrill of the story. It could add a different type of impact! It was still interesting none-the-less!