Once upon a time lived a wolf in a wild. He was away from
his family, the only child. Every day was a journey for the poor guy to find
food and shelter. He was lonely in the nude with no helper. The daily journeys
of his life were lessons. All he had was himself, his own impression. The wolf
one day stumbled upon a flock of sheep. For days, he remained hungry observing
the flock, in his mind he was coming up with a plot. Not only did he observe
the sheep but also the shepherd, since he is the one giving out all the
measures. Typical the wolf would find a cunning way to get by, since the wolf
is known for being sly. This wolf was smarter than being predictable, he just
never wanted to be typical. He had no family, no one to ever be his mentor, not
even a family that he could have done for. However, this never stopped the wolf
from being ambitious, he learned the hard way but he grew to be vicious. He was
viciously developed into a different kind; no one could understand what went
through his mind. Before spotting the flock of sheep, he had no one else to
creep. To approach the flock, he knew he had different ways, the plots were
drawn after a couple of days. Daily spectating and trying to understands the shepherd’s
actions, the wolf was planning every fraction. But a certain something grew in
him, a satisfaction. A satisfaction that was a result of observing the
interaction, among the sheep. The Wolf no longer looked for his lunch but the
thoughts in his mind plunged. He realized there was something bigger than food missing
in his life. May it be a family, kid or wife? Maybe it was all the time spent
on watching but all the ideas where coming to his mind and the wolf was not
dodging. So as he sat back and was stalking he had two options to take. He
could be a typical wolf and make no mistake. He would have to cunningly
approach the shepherd and gain his trust. Show him what he wants to see, not
the love but the lust. The other option was to be a unique figure, that would
purify his destiny of a born sinner. This option was not to be a killer or
someone that is simply looking for dinner, instead someone who trying to
reconsider what they are given with in order to deliver. As the days past, it
took a while for the wolf to decide, but by every move the flock and the
shepherd would do he would abide. Finally, the last day the wolf decided to
take the stride and approach the shepherd to open up to his decision and how he
made up his mind. As he approached, the first reaction was fear, the shepherd
directly ran and looked for his spear. The wolf yelled “Shepherd I come in
peace, so please I hope you would put down this piece”. The shepherd did not
consider what the wolf had to say, unfortunately he was only afraid that the
wolf is known to betray. It turned out the Wolf was actually coming because he
needed a friend, he was observing the flock for too long all he wanted was to
blend. Stereotypically judging the wolf, the shepherd stabbed the poor guy
without even giving a reply. The wolf bleeding heavily looked in the shepherd’s
eye and told him “All I wanted to become part of your flock, but now it’s too
late” The shepherd was in shock, as he knew it was not bait. This is a lesson
to never judge a book by its cover, the wolf was no longer a wolf but was a
creature lost in a forest that was looking for warmth and lost love to recover.
In the original story, the wolf approached the shepherd as a
friend. They became close friends to where the shepherd had trusted the wolf
and left him with flock of sheep. As the shepherd returned, he saw that the
wolf had eaten all his sheep. He realized that he was fooled and deceived by
the wolf by saying “Once a wolf, always a wolf”. The picture I used shows how the wolf kept his
distance from the flock of sheep and shepherd.
Original story: The Wolf and the Shepherd by Milo Winter
I really like where you went with this story! You introduced the wolf well and made it easy to figure out why he wanted a family or a friend. I thought it was interesting how you used the theme/lesson by making the story your own. It was a good twist, but I was hoping that the wolf would end up happy :(. I really thought you would follow through with the normal plot and have the wolf eat all the sheep, but I was pleasantly surprised. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis story reads almost like a monologue from a stage play, in that it’s a sequence of thoughts and reasoning that feels like it’s from one character’s point of view. But it also has pretty clear rising action, climactic event, and falling action. I think it’s unique and an interesting interpretation of the source material.
ReplyDeleteAlso, in the future, I would recommend is line breaks to separate into paragraphs, just to make it easier to read.
I really liked how you chose the story from the whole "Never judge a book by its cover". It was a different approach since all the wolf wanted was someone he could call his own. The shepherd realized his mistake but by then it was too late to do anything about it. He had already killed the wolf and there was nothing he could have done to save him.
ReplyDeleteYou did a really good job with this story! The 'Wow' moment for me was actually found within the first few lines when I realized the story was going to rhyme. I thought the first rhyming set could maybe be an accident but once I recognized the pattern, I was hooked. Rhyming is very interesting and impressive to me. At the end of the story, I was wondering what if the shepherd had a second chance to show that he had learned his lesson. I love happy endings, so I was really sad for both the shepherd and the poor little wolf. You did a good of creating sympathy for the wolf, starting from the beginning. I thought it was very cool that you tied the story to the whole 'don't judge a book by its cover' lesson. I was not expecting that, but it illustrated the lesson very well.
ReplyDeleteI really like your spin on the original story. I like how you used your story to show that you can't judge a book by its cover. I like that you changed the character of the shepherd in that he was not foolish but instead proactive in guarding his sheep. I am also super impressed that you made the story rhyme. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI just finished reading your week 10 story, which was about a wolverine. So I think it's funny that your week 2 story from way back at the beginning of the class also has a wolf in it. I would suggest breaking up your story instead of leaving it in one big paragraph. It's hard to stay focused. I might even add in some dialogue too, to help your reader. Nice job!
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